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  1. Hoàng ZIM

    Hoàng ZIM Master Staff Member

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    Topic:
    It is more important for schoolchildren to learn about local history than world history.
    To what extent to you agree or disagree?

    Bài mẫu band 8 của thầy Toàn ZIM

    Many people have valued the role of local history to schoolchildren over that of world history. In my opinion, I disagree with those people as both of them are equally essential for young learners.

    Studying the history of their hometown is for sure an indispensable part of school’s curriculum during students’ early education. I believe having thorough insights into what happened in the past at one’s locality develops his patriotism. For example, children of primary and secondary schools in my village are taught about how their ancestors defended their land against outside intruders and reclaimed sovereignty. Therefore, those young children would take pride in their origin and treasure the life they know as it is today. Additionally, I think it is not only students’ privilege but also their responsibility to know about their own history to understand their hometown’s traditional values and identity.

    From another angle, learning about world history shares equal importance just as local one. Acquiring knowledge about the world’s past events equips students with a more well-rounded perspective of life. Lessons about the World War or Feminism protest against women’s abuse and discrimination would help those learners enhance their understanding about various aspects of the world. Furthermore, I think that being taught about the other countries’ historical backgrounds would benefit young learners in their future career. Students who accumulate knowledge of this particular field at an early age would possess a golden selling point to work for foreign enterprises, especially those who highly value company culture like Japan.

    In conclusion, I believe the significance of domestic and international history cannot be brought into comparison to see which one is more necessary because they have distinctively equal meanings to children.

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    Essay analysis

    For this topic, I am going to disagree with the topic, but I still want to talk about both local and world history. Therefore, my opinion would be they are equally important.This way, I could write one paragraph about local history and the other about world history.

    The first body paragraph is about how important learning about local history is to schoolchildren by providing 2 ideas:
    - I believe having thorough insights into what heppened in the past at one's locality develops his patriotism.
    - Additionally I think it is not only student' privilege but also their responsibility to know about their own history to understand their hometown's traditional values and identity.

    The second body paragraph gives 2 reasons why world history is as important as local history.
    - Acquiring knowledge about the world's past equips students with a more well-rounded perspective of life.
    - Furthermore, I think that being taught about the other countries' historical backgrounds would benefit young learners in their future career.

    Useful vocabulary:

    - thorough insights into: Hiểu biết cặn kẽ về cái gì.
    - patriotism: Lòng yêu nước.

    - sovereignty: Chủ quyền.
    - take pride in their origin: Tự hào về lòng yêu nước.
    - traditional values and identity: Những giá trị truyền thống và con người.
    - well-rounded perspective of life: Một cái nhìn quan điểm toàn diện hơn về cuộc sống.
    - historical backgrounds: Bối cảnh lịch sử.

    - company culture: Văn hóa doanh nghiệp.
     

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  2. Phạm Hồng Thạo

    Phạm Hồng Thạo New Member

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  3. hoale1996

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    thầy ơi a golden selling point ở đây nên hiểu là gì ạ
     

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  4. kathrine

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  5. Florence Truong

    Florence Truong Master

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    Em thấy "company culture" dịch là văn hóa doanh nghiệp có vẻ ko hợp lý lắm. Thầy có thể giải thích cách khác được không ạ?
     

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