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    TR 4.5
    You should find more than one idea for each supporting paragraphs
    The explanation for your idea is well-developed, however the illustration for them are still awkward for an argumentative essay

    CC 5.0
    Some sentences are rather long, so it’s hard for the examiner to make out
    Some sentences written with weird words are not suitable for the sentence’s meaning

    LR 5.5
    Good use of words and linking phrases, however, you should try to use more words relating to the topic

    GRA 5.5
    Some sentences are two long to keep up with
    Still grammatical errors needing to be worked on
     

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    TR: 6.0
    Met the basic requirements of the essay, although too long

    CC: 5.0
    Words are not used properly in many occasions, creating confusion and unclear ideas
    Some sentences aren’t well linked to one another

    LR: 5.0
    Some words are wrong in meaning
    Paraphrased sentences can sometime be confusing

    GRA: 5.5
    Some grammatical mistakes
    Verbs are not properly used
     

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    TR: 5.0
    Met the basic requirements of the essay but some ideas do not relate to the question

    CC: 4.5
    Some words are misused, creating confusion and prevent ideas from being thoroughly explained
    Sentences sometime are not logically linked

    LR: 5.0
    Many words are used without thorough understanding, therefore making sentences confusing and hard to comprehend

    GRA: 5.0
    Verbs and linking words aren’t used properly
     

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    TR: 5.0
    Met the basic requirements of the essay

    CC: 5.0
    Ideas are not seperated and quite similar to one another

    LR: 4.0
    Words are misused, creating confusion
    Paraphasing makes some sentences confusing, making the paragraphs hard to comprehend

    GRA: 4.5
    Verbs and linking words are not used properly in many occasions, and aren’t effective in explaining ideas
     

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    TR 6.0
    Good structure!
    You need to be clearer, e.g: why people being able to afford air conditioners can lead to a strain on the country’s electricity grid?

    CC 6.5
    Your fluency is good, although there are some misused words

    LR 6.0
    You should try to paraphrase more
    Some phrases are repeated several times, try to be more inventive

    GRA 6.0
    Your grammar is okay, try to use some more complex structures
    You need to recheck your essay because you might miss some words “ AT the same time”
     

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    TR: 5.0
    Met the basic requirements of the essay
    Some ideas are still irrelevant to the question

    CC: 5.0
    Some words aren’t properly used, making sentences and paragraphs confusing
    Sentences are poorly connected

    LR: 4.0
    Failed to paraphase some sentenes, making the essay confusing and loosely connected
    Spelling errors

    GRA: 4.0
    Verbs and linking words are not properly used
     

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    TR 5.0
    Your two reasons aren’t specifically supported. Your second idea also seemed to be less developed than your first one
    Linking words aren’t efficiently used

    CC 4.0
    The essay is not natural
    A lot of wrong words were used, which makes your essay rather confusing
    Some sentences are hard to understand, some are not well-linked

    LR 5.0
    Many words are wrongly used, need to practice to improve your fluency

    GRA 4.0
    Many grammatical mistakes, need improvement. Eg: “is the environmental problems”
     

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    Overall: 6.0

    TR: 6.0
    Met the basic requirements of the essay

    CC: 6.0
    Some ideas are still a bit awkward and do not contribute to the essay

    LR: 5.0
    Some words aren’t properly used
    Some sentences are not well linked

    GRA: 6.0
    A few grammatical mistakes
    Misused linking words
     

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    Overall: 5.5

    TR: 6.0
    Met the basic requirements of the essay

    CC: 5.0
    Some sentences are somewhat confusing but still logically connected

    LR: 5.5
    Words used in the paragraph can be quite confusing and appear not well-understood

    GRA: 5.0
    Grammatical mistakes
    Verbs and linking words are not used properly
     

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    TR 5.5
    Too long, cut them down, you only need 2-3 ideas in your body paragraphs
    Other than that, you did great

    CC 6.5
    There are some misused words so some sentences are dark in meaning
    Other than that, simple and neat.

    LR 6.0
    You should try to paraphrase more

    GRA 5.5
    Spelling mistakes! E.g: uncontemplately
    Grammar mistakes eg:“ temperature in big cities will certainly raise”
     

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    TR 3.0
    A bit too long
    The essay doesn’t meet the scoring criteria
    Too many unnecessary hooks

    CC 3.5
    The essay is not formal. Don’t write like you speak
    The essay’s rather childish and not suitable. Try to improve your vocabulary and grammar on this

    LR 3.5
    Still very weak, need to work on basic vocabulary before looking into specific topic vocabulary

    GRA 4.0
    Spelling mistakes!
    A lot of grammatical mistakes (active-passive,….)
     

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    Overall: 5.0

    TR: 6.0
    Met the basic requirements of the essay

    CC: 5.0
    Ideas are presented with logic and relate to one another, choices of words and how each ideas are expressed can still be confusing

    LR: 4.0
    Poor choices of words and lack of understanding of the words that have been used, creating confusion
    Spelling errors

    GRA: 4.0
    Verbs and linking words aren’t used properly, making some sentences awkward and confusing
     

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    TR 5.0
    Good structure
    Too many words, cut them down, be more precise
    Some sentences are too long

    CC 4.0
    Don’t use they and we in one essay
    Lots of words are misused in meaning
    Your two body paragraphs are well-written, the opening and ending needs to be clearer, avoid long unnecessary sentences

    LR 5.5
    Good use of words and linking phrases, however, some words are still misused, so some sentences are awkward

    GRA 6.0
    Minor grammar errors, other than that, you did a good job! Try to add more complex sentences
     

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    TR 5.0
    Too many words, cut them down, maybe at the opening or the ending, be more precise

    CC 4.5
    The opening and ending need to be clearer, avoid long and unnecessary sentences
    Misused words so some sentences are dark in meaning eg:“Beside, the vital things that i can not fail to mention”

    LR 4.5
    Some unusual vocabulary is used, yet is not suitable in the sentence

    GRA 5.0
    Spelling mistakes!
    Some sentences are dark in meaning, also adverbs are not efficiently put in some cases
     

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    TR 3.0
    The essay requires cause and problems, not cause and solutions, so your third paragraph is off the scoring criteria.

    CC 4.0
    A lot of wrong words were used, which makes your essay rather confusing
    Some sentences are too long, some are hard to understand, some are not well-linked
    Some spelling errors

    LR 4.0
    You tried to put in paraphrases but they make your sentences rather weird and confusing to understand. Try writing a regular essay with common words first

    GRA 4.5
    There are still grammatical mistakes, many linking words are made up which are not used effectively in the essay
     

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