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IELTS WRITING CONTEST - WEEK 2

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  1. HuongHani

    HuongHani New Member

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    With the mounting concern for territorial conflicts, the question as to whether third parties should anticipate these issues or not has been much debated. I will analyze both approaches of this matter in this essay before stating my own opinion.
    On the one hand, many suppose that third parties' intervention tend to exert many positive effects, one of which is the unbiased conditions. Take the case of conflict of beaches and islands between Philippines and China as an example. Without the supports from many countries such as The United States, it is certainly struggling for Philippines, a lower economic and military, to raise their voice and won in the campaign of confirming their dominant. In fact, the aids namely weapons, war- ships and economic contracts are beneficiaries of weaker parties in these conflicts such as Vietnam and Malaysia from the outside forces. Hence, this makes it clear why many are favour of the interference of the outside parties in order to guarantee the equity.
    On the other hand, critics of the aforementioned argument often counter that these participations are fundamentally dangerous. Firstly, the third nations can easily take advantage of complicated conditions to give contracts that do not have equal benefits among parties. With the aim of receiving their support, many have endured the loss of a part of nation's continent or signed these non-beneficial contracts. In addition, it is obvious that through co-operativeness, the outside forces would have more chances to investigate the politics, economics and society of the weaker sides. It means that their weaknesses are well awared of the potential competitors. Consequently, it is undeniable that joining-hands with the third countries contain many detrimental consequences.
    In brief, from the above arguments, I contend that the outside parties' anticipation is the optimum way to curb the territorial problems. However, it is advisable that governments have proper policies in co-operating other countries so that they can protect their dominion without attracting more rivals.
     

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  3. Ivytran

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    Concerning the issue whether there should be an intervention by exterior forces for the territorial disagreements of an individual one, many people hold different views. Some people claim that it is necessary and imperative while some other argue that each nation should tackle their own problems. As for me, I am in consummate accord with interfering in territorial conflicts.

    On the one hand, the perception that outside forces should not interfere about territorial problems of a nation stems from the fact that there would not be an equality between countries, exacerbating the already tense relations between the three communities. There is little room for doubt that favoring one country and opposing the other one simultaneously could create an enormous envying from the objected nation, which would abate the choice that there will be a reconciliation between the two sides. Moreover, rarely would the outside forces remain the friendly relationship with that side.

    On the other hand, the intervention of the outside forces is a driving force for the nations so that they could initiate their aspiration to seize the control over their own regions again. Some countries lost their land absurdly, causing an unfair fight with the other nations; therefore, obviously, they need the support from international organizations. Vietnam gives us a convincing illustration when they really desire the aid from not only their own government and general populace but also other countries. In the light of the fact that China is reluctant to recognize Hoang Sa and Truong Sa archipelagoes as their own assets, Vietnam- the former owner is more prone to oppress, leading to the need of invaluable helps of international organizations.

    In conclusion, the interference of outside forces is essential when today there might be some strong nations endeavoring to invade the territory from other disadvantageous countries. Personally, I advocate the outside assistance because the weak countries will have the drive to ask for their domains back.
     

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  4. IELTS Forum

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    Ad chốt ở đây nhé, các bài nộp đúng trong khung thời gian (tính đến bài của bạn @Emily Bay ) sẽ được xét thưởng, các bài chậm hơn tính đến bài của bạn @Ivy Trần sẽ được chấm nhưng ko xét thưởng nhé cả nhà.

    Thời gian nhận bài đã hết, chúc cả nhà ngủ ngon và nhớ khung giờ public kết quả vào 22h22 thứ 5 tuần tiếp nhé ;)
     

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  5. IELTS Forum

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    KẾT QUẢ CUỘC THI IWC TUẦN 2

    Một số nhận xét:
    • Đề lần này thực sự khó - đề cập vấn đề đang rất nóng và rất thời sự hiện nay. Tuy ADMIN không kỳ vọng nhiều nhưng rất vui vì đã có những điểm 6.0 xuất hiện :)
    • Để giảm nhiệt cho các bạn đề tuần này "dự" là sẽ dễ xơi hơn cho cả nhà
    • Danh sách các bạn được giải như sau:
      • buithuha1998 - 6.0 - ZIM G - Giải thưởng 200.000 VNĐ
      • anhngocday1994 - 6.0 - ZIM S - Giải thưởng 100.000 VNĐ
      • msyunie - ZIM C - Giải thưởng 50.000 VNĐ
    • Ngày mai các admin sẽ public nhận xét cho từng bài tham gia đúng quy định trong đợt này, ảnh dưới là kết quả điểm làm bài của các bạn
    • Các bạn trúng thưởng comment số điện thoại vào bên dưới để admin liên hệ gửi phần thưởng nhé
    Chúc cả nhà buổi tối vui vẻ ha:p

    Thân ái,
    ZIM
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  6. td7122004

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    There were no 3 although the topic was called "harder". It seemed like the common quality of members was increased.
     

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  7. QuyTran

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    Ad ơi week 1 em được giải mà không ai liên hệ cho em nhận thưởnggggg T.T~
     

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  8. msyunie

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    Is the grading system precise? Do you give us the same grading as in real tests? Because I dont think the grading is fair to the quality of the writings.
     

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  9. msyunie

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  10. THuynh

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    When will we get the comments from the judges on our essays?
     

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  11. anhngocday1994

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    Thank you guys very much
    My phone number is : 0985368237
     

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  12. buithuha1998

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  14. QuyTran

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    ad ơi tuần 1 e được giải mà vẫn chưa được nhận thưởng :( sdt e là 01287075812
     

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  15. IELTS Forum

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    Để ad check lại nhen
     

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