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IELTS WRITING CONTEST - WEEK 3

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  1. Hoàng ZIM

    Hoàng ZIM Master Staff Member

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    Overall: 3.5

    TR: 3.0

    Your essay is underlength ( 193 words ), the essay requires at least 250 words

    Overall, you have good ideas, but they aren’t well-developed with your supporting sentences

    CC: 4.0

    There are a lot of misused words and phrases

    Some sentences don’t relate to the given topic and can be quite confusing

    LR: 3.5

    You vocabulary relating to the topic is adequate but you need a deeper understanding of the words used in the essay in order to utilize them

    You need more specific examples to make your essay more convincing

    You need more specific examples to make your essay more convincing

    GRA: 3.5

    Grammatical mistakes can still be found in the essay

    There are some spelling errors
     

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  2. Hoàng ZIM

    Hoàng ZIM Master Staff Member

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    OVERALL: 3.0

    TR: 3.0

    The structure to your essay is not well-constructed

    The essay is under-length

    The ideas given are rather odd for the topic

    You did not fulfill the requested task in the question

    CC: 3.5

    There are a lot of misused words and phrases

    Some illustrations for your ideas still lack of reasons to support

    Some sentences don’t relate to the given topic

    Some sentences are confusing so it’s hard for the examiner to make out

    Some sentences are really childlike

    LR: 3.0

    Many unusual words which are wrongly used in this essay

    You need more specific examples to make your essay more convincing

    You need to use more collocation relating to the topic

    GRA: 4.0

    Your grammar is not sufficiently good

    Some sentences are dark in meaning, some aren’t qualified to be a sentence

    Try to use daily used words, practice simple sentences before jumping to unusual, complex sentences
     

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  3. Hoàng ZIM

    Hoàng ZIM Master Staff Member

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    Overall: 5.0

    TR: 5.0

    Overall, you have good ideas, but you don’t seem to illustrate them clear enough in your essay

    CC: 5.0

    There are a lot of misused words and phrases

    Some illustrations for your ideas are rather redundant

    Sentences can still be quite confusing and over-complicated

    LR: 4.5

    Your vocabulary relating to the problem is adequate, but you need a deeper understanding in order to use words properly

    You need better examples to make your essay more convincing

    You need to use more collocation relating to the topic

    GRA: 5.0

    Grammatical mistakes can be found in the essay

    There are still some spelling errors
     

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  4. Hoàng ZIM

    Hoàng ZIM Master Staff Member

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    OVERALL: 5.5

    TR: 6.0

    The structure to your essay is well-constructed

    Overall, you have good ideas, but you don’t seem to illustrate them clear enough in your essay

    CC: 5.0

    There are many misused words and phrases

    Some illustrations for your ideas still lack of reasons to support

    Some sentences are out of context

    You should not use acronyms such as “don’t, can’t…..”

    LR: 5.5

    Some unusual words which are wrongly used in this essay

    You need more specific examples to make your essay more convincing

    You need to use more collocation relating to the topic

    GRA: 5.0

    Your grammar is good/ not sufficiently good

    Some sentences are dark in meaning, some aren’t qualified to be a sentence (e.g: because the sale of goods in the contrary quality)

    Try to use daily used words, practice simple sentences before jumping to unusual, complex sentences
     

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  5. Hoàng ZIM

    Hoàng ZIM Master Staff Member

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    Overall: 4.0

    TR: 3.0

    Your essay is heavily over-length ( 362 words )

    Several ideas put into the essay are rather redundant and not suitable for the topic

    You should also mention your personal opinion in either the opening or the conclusion

    CC: 4.5

    There are a lot of misused words and phrases

    Some sentences are confusing and hard to make out

    LR: 4.0

    Your vocabulary relating to the topic is adequate, but a deeper understanding is needed in order to use them properly

    You need to use more collocation relating to the topic

    GRA: 4.5

    Grammatical mistakes can still be found in the essay

    Some sentences can be too long and over-complicated, making them dark in meaning

    There are still some spelling errors
     

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  6. Hoàng ZIM

    Hoàng ZIM Master Staff Member

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    Overall: 5.0

    TR: 5.0

    The structure to your essay is not well-constructed

    Overall, you have good ideas, but they aren’t well-developed with your supporting sentences

    You should also mention your personal opinion on the given topic in the opening or the conclusion

    CC: 5.0

    There are a lot of misused words and phrases

    Some illustrations for your ideas are rather redundant

    Some sentences are too long and should be cut down or be divided into 2 sentences

    LR: 5.0

    You need more specific examples to make your essay more convincing

    You need to use more collocation relating to the topic

    GRA: 5.0

    Grammatical mistakes can still be found in the essay as well as spelling errors
     

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  7. Hoàng ZIM

    Hoàng ZIM Master Staff Member

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    OVERALL: 5.5

    TR: 6.0

    The structure to your essay is well-constructed

    Overall, you have good ideas, but they aren’t well-developed with your supporting sentences

    Your opening should paraphrase the question given.

    Your two body paragraphs are not symmetrical in terms of ideas and supports.

    CC: 5.0

    There are a lot of misused words and phrases

    Some illustrations for your ideas are rather redundant

    Some sentences are confusing so it’s hard for the examiner to make out

    Some sentences are too long and should be cut down or be divided into 2 sentences

    LR: 5.5

    Many unusual words which are wrongly used in this essay

    You need more specific examples to make your essay more convincing

    You need to use more collocation relating to the topic

    GRA: 5.5

    Your grammar still needs to be worked on

    Some sentences are dark in meaning

    Try to use more complex sentences to raise your band-score (for the ones who write okay)

    There are still some spelling errors and slight grammatical mistakes
     

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  8. Hoàng ZIM

    Hoàng ZIM Master Staff Member

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    OVERALL: 6.0

    TR: 5.5

    The structure to your essay is well-constructed, however, the opening paragraph is longer than the two body paragraphs, which is not recommended

    Overall, you have good ideas, but they should be more well-developed with your supporting sentences

    You forgot your personal opinion of the aforementioned topic in your conclusion

    CC: 6.0

    Some illustrations for your ideas still lack of reasons to support

    Some sentences are too long and should be cut down or be divided into 2 sentences

    LR: 6.5

    You have a good range of vocabulary relating to the topic

    You need more specific examples to make your essay more convincing

    GRA: 6.5

    Your grammar is good

    Some sentences are dark in meaning

    There are still some spelling errors
     

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  9. Hoàng ZIM

    Hoàng ZIM Master Staff Member

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    OVERALL: 2.5

    TR: 2.5

    You haven’t finished the essay

    The essay is under-length

    The ideas given are not suitable for the topic

    You don’t seem to illustrate your points clear enough in your essay

    CC: 2.5

    There are a lot of misused words and phrases

    Some illustrations for your ideas still lack of reasons to support

    Some sentences don’t relate to the given topic

    Some sentences are confusing so it’s hard for the examiner to make out

    LR: 3.0

    You have an ill range of vocabulary relating to the topic

    Many unusual words which are not used correctly in this essay

    You need more specific examples to make your essay more convincing

    You need to use more collocation relating to the topic

    GRA: 2.5

    Your grammar is not sufficiently good

    Some sentences are dark in meaning, some aren’t qualified to be a sentence (e.g:…)

    Try to use daily used words, practice simple sentences before jumping to unusual, complex sentences

    There are still some spelling errors
     

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  10. Hoàng ZIM

    Hoàng ZIM Master Staff Member

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    Overall: 4.0

    TR: 4.0

    Overall, you have good ideas, but they aren’t well-developed with your supporting sentences

    The structure to your essay is not well-constructed

    CC: 4.0

    There are a lot of misused words and phrases

    Some illustrations for your ideas are still lack of reasons to support

    LR: 4.0

    Avoid using idioms in academic writing

    Your vocabulary relating to the given topic is adequate, but you need to understand the words used in the essay more thoroughly in order to use them properly

    You need more specific examples to make your essay more convincing

    You need to use more collocation relating to the topic

    GRA: 4.0

    There are many grammatical mistakes through out the essay

    Spelling errors can still be found in the essay

    Some sentences are dark in meaning and confusing
     

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  11. Hoàng ZIM

    Hoàng ZIM Master Staff Member

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    Overall: 3.5

    TR: 3.0

    The essay is underlength ( 225 words ), the essay requires at least 250 words

    Overall, you have good ideas, but you don’t seem to illustrate them clear enough in your essay

    CC: 4.0

    There are a lot of misused words and phrases

    Some illustrations for your ideas need more reasons to support

    LR: 4.0

    Avoid using idioms in academic writing ( Eg: piece of cake)

    Your vocabulary relating to the topic is adequate but there are still many words that are not used properly in terms of meaning

    You need more specific examples to make your essay more convincing

    You need to use more collocation relating to the topic

    GRA: 4.0

    Grammatical mistakes can still be found in the essay

    There are some spelling errors
     

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  12. Hoàng ZIM

    Hoàng ZIM Master Staff Member

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    OVERALL: 5.5

    TR: 6.0

    The structure to your essay is well-constructed

    Overall, you have good ideas, but you don’t seem to illustrate them clear enough in your essay

    CC: 5.0

    There are many misused words and phrases

    Some illustrations for your ideas still lack of reasons to support, be more clear next time

    Some sentences are confusing so it’s hard for the examiner to make out

    LR: 5.0

    You have an okay range of vocabulary relating to the topic

    Some unusual words which are wrongly used in this essay

    You need more specific examples to make your essay more convincing

    You need to use more collocation relating to the topic

    GRA: 6.0

    You still have problem with suffixes (noun-verb-adj)

    Some sentences are dark in meaning

    Try to use more complex sentences to raise your band-score
     

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  15. Hoàng ZIM

    Hoàng ZIM Master Staff Member

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    Nguyễn Trường An cho ban tổ chức xin contact để trao giải nhé ;)
     

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